http://www.wetokolehawaii.com/revise-the-following-paragraph-improving-it-without-changing-its-overall-meaning-look-at-use-of-paralleism Just another WordPress weblog Mon, 23 Jan 2012 00:37:56 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 http://www.wetokolehawaii.com/revise-the-following-paragraph-improving-it-without-changing-its-overall-meaning-look-at-use-of-paralleism/comment-page-1#comment-2043 embeddeddog Sat, 06 Feb 2010 19:06:34 +0000 http://www.wetokolehawaii.com/revise-the-following-paragraph-improving-it-without-changing-its-overall-meaning-look-at-use-of-paralleism#comment-2043 Family get-togethers at my crib are always a little bit wack. Check it out, these events usually revolve around some kind of task or situation that requires the expertise of my pops. Last weekend was a prime example. Saturday afternoon my pops and bro arrived hungry. While my pops crawled under my truck to inspect the leaking brake line, I heat up the grill, place plates and utensils on the patio table, and start covering the watermelon with ice. After serving everyone bratwursts, lots of tomatoes, and sauerkraut, I light the citronella candles and settled down to eat. The next morning, my homeboys arrived early, and they were hungry again. I organized the table, usher them to their seats, and start breakfast. A dozen eggs, pieces of bacon, and some bread later, my male relatives were ready to attack the leaky brakes of my Escalade. Family get-togethers at my crib are always a little bit wack. Check it out, these events usually revolve around some kind of task or situation that requires the expertise of my pops. Last weekend was a prime example. Saturday afternoon my pops and bro arrived hungry. While my pops crawled under my truck to inspect the leaking brake line, I heat up the grill, place plates and utensils on the patio table, and start covering the watermelon with ice. After serving everyone bratwursts, lots of tomatoes, and sauerkraut, I light the citronella candles and settled down to eat. The next morning, my homeboys arrived early, and they were hungry again. I organized the table, usher them to their seats, and start breakfast. A dozen eggs, pieces of bacon, and some bread later, my male relatives were ready to attack the leaky brakes of my Escalade.

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